Letter of Self Introduction

Subject: Self Introduction 

 

Dear Professor Brad, 

 

I am writing this letter of self-introduction hoping that you will get to know more about me. My name is Juergen and I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with a diploma in automation and mechatronic systems.  


I previously worked in a company that specialises in the manufacturing of printers and by working closely with the engineers over there, I have gained valuable experience with the automated machines that they are using. Back in my polytechnic days, I have through many hands-on lessons in building a miniature wheelchair. Those lessons made me realised that the world of robotics is intriguing and also there were many similar modules that are relevant to the robotics system course hence my reason to pursue it as my degree. 


Communicating with strangers has always been tough for me as I lacked the courage to initiate a conversation with them. The absence of confidence is probably due to the lack of skills in holding a conversation and the lack of practise. Speaking to a crowd is something that I hate the most. Applying critical thinking skills to daily conversations is something I wish to learn as it enables me to carry out intelligent conversations. Therefore, at the end of this module, I hope to improve my communication skills be it speaking in a closed group or to the public. My strength is that I am willing to learn. I got the never-give-up attitude, I think.  


Those unique lessons and experiences that I gained throughout the years might not be something that others have been through and that is why I believe that I am special.  


Thank you for reading and I hope that you got to know a little more about me. 


Regards, 

Juergen Tan 

Comments

  1. Daniel LeeSeptember 14, 2022 at 7:47 AM

    Thank you for the letter.

    After reading it, I found a few mistakes that I am going to point out. Firstly, in the second paragraph, instead of writing "...closely with the engineers over there", it can be changed to "...closely with the engineers in the company". Secondly, just after that line, the use of the word ' experience ' should be changed to 'experiences'. Next, also in the third paragraph, there is a missing word the sentence " I have through many hands-on lessons...". I think you are trying to say " I have been through many hands-on lessons..". Lasty, there are a few punctuation errors in the second and third paragraph. The sentence in the second paragraph " ...relevant to the robotics system course hence my reason to pursue it as my degree" should have a comma before and after the word hence. In the third paragraph, the sentence "I hope to improve my communication skills be it speaking in a closed group or to the public" should have a comma after the words 'communication skills'

    Other than these mistakes, it was a letter with details and it was easily understandable.

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  2. Brad BlackstoneSeptember 26, 2022 at 2:06 AM

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  3. Brad BlackstoneSeptember 26, 2022 at 2:11 AM

    Dear Juergen,

    Thank you for this clear, concise and fairly detailed personal sharing. I appreciate how the content is aligned with the assignment brief, the organization is straight forward, and the language use generally effective. You've done a decent job providing supporting information for each specific content area, allowing us readers to gain an understanding of who you are.

    From the reflection on your comm skills strength and weakness, it's easy to see that you have potential for becoming both an effective communicator and thinker because you know what you need and you have the motivation to improve. You should also be a more active RSE student thanks to your interest in automated machines, and your prior project experience means you've done it before and can do it again. Now the challenge for you is to make more waves in the process, that is, you need to come out of your shell to speak up more and become a more active speaker. Practice makes perfect.

    There are a couple areas of language use in this letter that you can also improve upon review:
    1. verb issues
    -- Those lessons made me realised .... > (verb form) Those lessons made me realise ....
    2. need for commas
    -- Those unique lessons and experiences that I gained throughout the years might not be something that others have been through and that is why I believe that I am special. > ?
    -- Thank you for reading and I hope that you got to know a little more about me. > ?
    -- ... at the end of this module, I hope to improve my communication skills be it speaking in a closed group or to the public. > ?
    ... at the end of this module, I hope to improve my communication skills, be it speaking in a closed group or to the public.

    I look forward to hearing more from here to the term's end.

    Cheers,

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